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[离任作者] 【妻为万人奴】(3)

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其实我觉得作者应该描写一下为什么到了今天这一步啊,当初是多么的幸福美满,更加反衬现在的生活的无奈,再加入一些背景,比如男主角是因为什么而使自己的家庭变成现在这样,这样大家在看文的同时有一些惊醒,有点教育意义嘛。另,再再往后就是重口味调教了,我觉得这时候详细刻画一下男女主角的内心活动会更好一些。
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  • rlan 金币 +6 回复认真,鼓励! 2011-5-4 12:26

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